Hello,
I'm in the university cybercafe, blogging a greeting to all of you!
To be perfectly honest I don't have a lot to say, and my blog post notes are at home. So this is a bit scrappy, and pointless.
Hopefully soon I'll be posting a few bits of writing, I've got a few posts percolating away that will be ready to share with you, I just need more hours in the day! I've been up early, late to bed, trying to stretch the day so I can cram everything in, and it's tiring. So for now, please bear with me.
Here's a little something I wrote the other day while drinking a cup of my favourite peppermint tea in a cafe after a delicious lunch I didn't pay for!! People watching is one of my favourite things to do, and trying to guess people's stories is quite a lot of fun. Let me know what you think.
Amid the shattered remains of lunch
The bit you claimed too tough,
The piece I said wasn't right
A declaration hangs in the air
Words that can't be reclaimed
Once said, can't be taken back.
You fold the napkin neatly
Signal the waiter for the bill
I drain the glass, vermilion red
And try not to think about what was said.
I completely sympathise! Uni work = hard work, right? About your poem, I thought it was really good! The only thing that kind of rubbed me the wrong way was the double use of "declaration". Maybe substitute the first with something else? Otherwise, I thought it was very thoughtful and nicely done:)
ReplyDeleteWeirdly, in the original I didn't use declaration twice, typo!! That's what comes of writing a blog post in a noisy place I suppose!
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